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[楹联] 从一朵鲜花对仗又来学校说起

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从一朵鲜花对仗又来学校说起

      刚刚六点半起床,脑子里突然蹦出一朵鲜花对仗又来学校。花点时间,顺着这个思路,写点对联以及对联体诗的体会。
一朵鲜花
又来学校

      表面看来,这不是工对的对子。但我过去十多年来,与全国近十万诗联友在QQ诗联群和网络诗联论坛里出对求对的经验看,这副对子是工对的。这也是当今参与联界对对子的诗联友的共识。
      首先,又不是数词,是副词,但含有第二次再一次的意思,相当于数词二。所以,一对又,不是数词对仗作胜似数词对仗,是借义对仗,而不是词性对仗。很显然,又来学校,是通顺的,成立。一朵鲜花也是成立的。特别是鲜花对学校,名词对名词,工对。所以一朵鲜花对仗又来学校。反对的诗人,一定搬出,这是语法错误的对子。这种论点从诗的角度看,是对的。但从联的角度看,就错了。因为,当今联坛,这种对仗比比皆是。我呢,只不过是将两副对联合成一首对联体诗而已。于是,就有了《对联体诗律则(草稿)》“十、根据联律“允许不同词性相对” 的规则,对联体诗同样可以“暖暖”对 “淙淙”,“声”对“响”。”的规则。不必非议我的律则了,这个律则其实也是这十多年来本人浸淫联坛的总结。
      顺着一朵鲜花/又来学校,我继续写下去于是,一副工整的对联写出来了。
又来学校温功课【罗志海】
一朵鲜花映月光【罗志海】
      尊敬的诗人读者,难得你读我这一篇文章,你也许想评论一下吧。不过,你如果日后想成为一个伟大的语法家,那你就从语法上说起评论吧。还有,你还可以从犯不犯孤平,有没有三仄尾对三平尾等等入手分析对与错。你如果日后想成为一个伟大的诗人,就顺应联界与诗界的不同,点赞吧。我呢,只不过是把两副对联合成一首新诗,是诗联新诗种而已,不必大惊小怪,群起而攻呀。


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 楼主| 发表于 2019-1-16 09:32:06 | 显示全部楼层
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美好诗句

笔下诗穷搜旧梦
囊中句少酿新辞
娇花宠柳婆娑叶
佳丽美眉飒爽姿


Beautiful Verses

Under my pen
poems in poverty
search my old dreams

In the poetic bag
verses are less
make the new lyrics

The tender flowers
the favored willows
the whirling leaves

The beauty
the beautiful eyebrows
valiant and heroic in bearing


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缘份来了

桂舟钓月柳垂线
绝顶驭云风响鞭
百虑难通禅道境
三生难了爱情缘


Fate Is Coming

In a laurel boat fishing a moon
a willow hanged a thread
On the tiptop
riding a cloud
wind whipped loud

In the three lives
difficult to cut the fate of love
Thinking a hundred times
hard to get through the states of Zen and Tao

1/19/2019对联体 ● 七绝罗志海著译
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第7698首对联体诗
The 7,698th Two Pairs of Couplets

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山林

细雨千丝滋紫陌
春风一缕暖芳林
梅山款待识香客
竹舍隐居种柳人


The Hill Forest

A wisp of the spring breeze
warmed the fragrant forest
A thousand silks of the drizzle
moistened the purple road

In the plum hill
entertained guests knowing aromas
In the bamboo cottage
lived in seclusion
a person planting willows

1/23/2019格律体新诗 ● 七绝罗志海著译
Metric New Poetry ● Seven Words of Quatrain by Luo Zhihai
第7728首对联体诗
The 7,728th Two Pairs of Couplets

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四季

春苑拾来皆是句
冬节醉去不知年
一行鸿雁绘秋色
几个黄鹂闹夏天


Four Seasons

In the spring garden
what I picked up all the rhymes
In the Winter Festival
I got drunk didn’t know time

A row of the wild geese described the autumn colours
A few orioles noised in the summer

1/27/2019格律體新詩 ● 七絕羅志海著譯
Metric New Poetry ● Seven Words of Quatrain by Luo Zhihai
第7765首對聯體詩
The 7,765th Two Pairs of Couplets

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 楼主| 发表于 2019-1-31 15:19:43 | 显示全部楼层
风雨颂

诗园兰韵笑迎雨
尘世玉魂何惧风
朗月清溪潺古韵
黄莺紫燕颂春声


Ode Of Wind And Rain

In the poetic garden
the orchid rhymes greet rain smilingly
In the dust world
why does the jade soul fear wind?

The bright moon in the clear stream
murmuring the ancient rhymes
Voices of the yellow orioles and purple swallows
eulogize the spring

1/30/2019格律体新诗 ● 七绝罗志海著译
Metric New Poetry ● Seven Words of Quatrain by Luo Zhihai
第7794首对联体诗
The 7,794th Two Pairs of Couplets

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 楼主| 发表于 2019-2-3 15:13:48 | 显示全部楼层
激動

山水閒暇秋漸老
筆毫精妙韻尤新
月升夜晚相逢意
花落時分離別魂


Excitement

A writing brush is fine and ingenious
the rhymes are especially new
Mountains and water are leisurely
the autumn is gradually old

Moon rising in the evening
moods in meeting
Time falling flowers
the parting souls

2/2/2019格律體新詩 ● 七絕羅志海著譯
Metric New Poetry ● Seven Words of Quatrain by Luo Zhihai
第7830首對聯體詩
The 7,830th Two Pairs of Couplets

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 楼主| 发表于 2019-2-6 09:45:31 | 显示全部楼层
春夏秋冬

梅山雪谷寒冬画
电闪雷鸣炎夏歌
春润荒原铺绿毯
秋行骚海泛银波


Spring, Summer, Autumn And Winter

Lightning flashes and thunder rumbles
a hot summer song
A cold winter picture
in the plum hill
in the snow gully

Autumn walks in the poetic sea
ripples the silver waves
Spring moistens the wasteland
spreads the green blankets

2/5/2019格律体新诗 ● 七绝罗志海著译
Metric New Poetry ● Seven Words of Quatrain by Luo Zhihai
第7860首对联体诗
The 7,860th Two Pairs of Couplets

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 楼主| 发表于 2019-2-11 16:50:50 | 显示全部楼层
飘泊

人立天边参北斗
身居海角望南山
蝴蝶梦里桃红坠
日月泉边柳浪翻


Wandering

A man stood in the horizon
to see the Big Dipper

When he lived in the sea corner
he overlooked the South Mountain

In the dream of the butterfly
the peach blossoms were falling

Beside the spring of sun and moon
the willow waves were surging

2/10/2019格律體新詩 ● 七絕羅志海著譯
Metric New Poetry ● Seven Words of Quatrain by Luo Zhihai
第7897首對聯體詩
The 7,897th Two Pairs of Couplets

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 楼主| 发表于 2019-2-18 06:38:30 | 显示全部楼层
自在

沉浮一笑魄无碍
进退两宜客自闲
笔若流云风顺顺
心如止水恨绵绵


Unrestrained

A smile ups and downs
my soul is unimpeded
Advance and retreat
both appropriate
my guests are leisurely and free

My pen like a flowing cloud
wind is smooth
My heart like the stopping water
hate is continuous

2/17/2019格律体新诗 ● 七绝罗志海著译
Metric New Poetry ● Seven Words of Quatrain by Luo Zhihai
第7941首对联体诗
The 7,941th Two Pairs of Couplets

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 楼主| 发表于 2019-2-20 20:33:48 | 显示全部楼层
礼德诚信

白露凉秋绪
大寒飘雪花
礼德传世宝
诚信主人家


Ethics, Kindness, Credibility And Integrity

In the White Dew
the cold autumn moods
In the Big Cold
snowflakes floating

Ethics and kindness
treasure handed down
Credibility and integrity
the master’s family

2/19/2019格律体新诗 ● 五绝罗志海著译
Metric New Poetry ● Five Words of Quatrain by Luo Zhihai
第7974首对联体诗
The 7,974th Two Pairs of Couplets

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 楼主| 发表于 2019-2-24 19:48:09 | 显示全部楼层
自由恬淡

几时小我才恬淡
一个湖泊最自由
朵朵霞飘山脚下
盈盈月上柳梢头


Free And Indifferent To Fame Or Gain

What time will I be just indifferent to fame or gain?
A lake is freest
Pieces of the pink clouds floating at the foot of the hill
The limpid moon goes on the willow tip

2/23/2019格律体新诗 ● 七绝罗志海著译
Metric New Poetry ● Seven Words of Quatrain by Luo Zhihai
第8008首对联体诗
The 8,008th Two Pairs of Couplets

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 楼主| 发表于 2019-2-28 15:24:38 | 显示全部楼层
詩性閒情

蝶采花心多好色
夜深酒鬼更貪杯
養君詩性五千竹
陪我閒情三萬梅


Poetic Character And Leisurely Feelings

Night is deepj, a drunkard is too fond of drink
So lechery, the butterflies suck hearts of flowers

Culture your poetic character with five thousand bamboos
Accompany my leisurely feelings with thirty thousand plum flowers

2/27/2019格律體新詩 ● 七絕羅志海著譯
Metric New Poetry ● Seven Words of Quatrain by Luo Zhihai
第8040首對聯體詩
The 8,040th Two Pairs of Couplets

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 楼主| 发表于 2019-3-7 06:10:30 | 显示全部楼层
输与赢

输却三分淡
赢来一晌闲
溪流落叶雨
人伫飞花天

Lost And Win

Lost one-third slight
Won leisure of a part of the day
A stream flowed fallen leaf rain
A person long stood in the flying sky

3/6/2019格律体新诗 ● 五绝罗志海著译
Metric New Poetry ● Five Words of Quatrain by Luo Zhihai
第8070首对联体诗
The 8,070th Two Pairs of Couplets
       
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 楼主| 发表于 2019-3-12 09:28:56 | 显示全部楼层
地大物博

风摇细雨梳垂柳
花映野凫戏镜湖
白首一节博物志
琳琅满目证明书


Vast Territory And Abundant Resources

Wind shakes drizzle
combs the weeping willows
Flowers reflect
the wild ducks play in the Mirror Lake

A superb collection of beautiful things
the certificate
The Naturalis Historia
despite old age, ambition never fades

3/11/2019格律体新诗 ● 七绝罗志海著译
Metric New Poetry ● Seven Words of Quatrain by Luo Zhihai
第8110首对联体诗
The 8,110th Two Pairs of Couplets

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 楼主| 发表于 2019-3-19 15:10:22 | 显示全部楼层
难忘的岁月

数度霜冰,阳台春满新桃媚
几经风雨,月下秋盈老桂香
山中劲柏,默数世间烟火色
湖里游鱼,欢迎宋代水仙王


Unforgettable Years

After many storms
full of autumn below the moon
the old laurels are fragrant
Frost and ice several times
full of spring on the balcony
the new peaches are charming

The strong cypress in the mountain
silent to count colours of smoke and fire in the world
The swimming fish in the lake
greet the Narcissus King in the Song Dynasty

3/19/2019格律體新詩 ● 十一絕羅志海著譯
Metric New Poetry ● Eleven Words of Quatrain by Luo Zhihai
第8128首對聯體詩
The 8,128th Two Pairs of Couplets

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 楼主| 发表于 2019-3-24 20:37:24 | 显示全部楼层
秋天

黄菊向晚斗霜绽
朗月经秋随梦洁
遒劲松风陪鹤舞
清凉石椅请君歇


Autumn

The yellow chrysanthemums in the evening
fought frost blooming

The bright moon experienced autumn
followed dream cleaning

The vigorous wind of pines
accompanied cranes dancing

The cool stone chair
please rested on it

3/23/2019格律体新诗 ● 七绝罗志海著译
Metric New Poetry ● Seven Words of Quatrain by Luo Zhihai
第8166首对联体诗
The 8,166th Two Pairs of Couplets

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 楼主| 发表于 2019-4-1 05:58:53 | 显示全部楼层
奇人

竹枝常入画
柳色喜迎春
坦荡守林汉
安恬直发人


Eccentric Persons

The bamboo braches often enter into the paintings
The willow colours happy to greet spring
A quiet man with straight hairs
A magnanimous person guarding the forest

3/31/2019格律体新诗 ● 五绝罗志海著译
Metric New Poetry ● Five Words of Quatrain by Luo Zhihai
第8205首对联体诗
The 8,205th Two Pairs of Couplets

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